Things we will never see -- Day 4 of NaPoWriMo 2015
Things we will never see .
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For sure the wind, pushes our boat Electrical voltage, it shocks
Do you see light, catch a handful
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We know the effects of all these
And then some. More, many, we find
Results we know, deductive all
Science finds new ones every day
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The wind is simplest, windmills turn
Who can forget those pretty legs
Bared by breeze, Marilyn Monroe--
Lifted her skirt high as her head
Romantic all, better so than
A piece of wire, sail on our boat,
Light bulb, or blade of a windmill
Comes to mind, action, from each force
Harbor on Bosporus Strait, Istanbul, Turkey. Link to
Our 2013 Venice-Istanbul-Black Sea-Athens cruise
Treasured pieces of grown people -- sail boats?
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© 2013 and 2015 Jimmiehov
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© 2013 and 2015 Jimmiehov
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- NaPoWriMo 2015 is a project to write a poem every day in April, National Poetry Month. I am not sure that I will write one every day, we will see.
- Today I'm linked with Isadora Gruye's piece, "Caution: Tender Buttons," continuing with Day 4 of Poems in April at the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads and also Day 4 of NaPoWriMo 2015
- Today I'm linked with Isadora Gruye's piece, "Caution: Tender Buttons," continuing with Day 4 of Poems in April at the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads and also Day 4 of NaPoWriMo 2015
- Izzy's directions: Read the excerpts from Tender Buttons below and write a short poem about an object, foods, or a room in the style of Stein. I chose some objects, an invisible ones, then devoted a stanza for wind as my prompt for writing my short piece. Below I am posting one piece of Gertrude Stein's work, Tender Buttons from Izzy's.
Excerpt from Tender Buttons:
"... What is the current that makes machinery, that makes it crackle, what is the current that presents a long line and a necessary waist. What is this current.
What is the wind, what is it. ..."
Labels: Boat Poems +, NaPoWriMo 2015, Poem, Real Toads
posted by Jim @ 4/04/2015 04:04:00 PM
12 comments
12 Comments:
This does what Stein's poetry does. It sounds like it ought to make sense cause there are all these words and individually I understand them but when I put them together...duh, I don't know. So, I think you have succeeded, Jim.
I love it, for the Steinishness and also because I love sailing boats and you have captured something of their essence here. Maybe it's Impressionist as well as Cubist. ;)
I enjoyed this, Jim, and liked remembering Marilyn's famous photo. And as to your question on my piece, YES, I filtered mine somewhat and doctored up what first came. I dont mind unleashing my Crazy to some degree, but am not sure I want folks to know HOW crazy I really am. LOL.
I very much enjoyed this journey. I love the word order and spacing. To me the words did make a story, there was logic to the illogic and an evolution from a simple wind, to marilyn...I devoured each syllable. Well done and viva la
This style really suits your didactic approach. There is a forthright tone which lends credibility to your phrasing. I liked this poem very much.
First of all, beautiful photos. You gave us eyes to see the wind with this piece. I could even feel its movement.
I like the Istanbul pic, too. And have left a comment in reply to your comment on mine. :)
luv how you balance the seriousness with the shifts of incongruence; you have definitely written in the mode of Stein
thanks for dropping in to read mine
much love...
You have underscored the importance of invisible forces, Jim. And it made me smile that you chose Marilyn Monroe's dress to do so. Nice one. Good luck with the rest of the month and you PAD!
Very charming, Jim! And loved Marilyn's skirt flying up. Thanks. k. (Manicddaily)
Interesting, Jim. I like this. We just watched an episode of the Twilight Zone where a man was in an epic battle with machines (and lost), do you recall that? Your poem seems to be its refrain.:)
Well done, Mr. Jim! You and Marilyn make a good team!
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